Weightlifting commonwealth games

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I was in the waiting room, my coach was writing down how much I was going to lift it was 179k. They call me out I go on the stage I go over to grip my hands with the white powder. I go up to the bar I hear the crowd cheering me on. I squatted down and put my hands on the cold bar. I pick it up but suddenly my left neay clicks and I drop the bar I am so angry with myself that I scream.

I have to go back to the waiting room. I am so angry, I go and practice with the bar in the waiting room. Then they call me out for my second attempt with that weight. My heart was pumping when I walked to the grey bar. I kept telling myself that I can do it in my head. I bent my legs and put my large hands on the bar. It fell’s wet because of the sweet I lift it up and I get it over my head but only for a split second and then I drop it.

I go back to the waiting room I know I am not going to lift the next weight but If I do I get gold. I practice until I am called out. When I get out on to the stage I have to go to the bar it is so nerve racking. I squatted down and I pick the bar up I am so focused and then I get it over my head and I hear over the the intercom “ Kate Bell has got gold” I drop the bar and run around screaming with happiness.

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